This is my saddest attempt to try something new
The line before really was written in cursive
I was simply trying to spice up my day; to try something new
But it didn’t really help – it even hurt a little bit
Nothing is new, and my poetry runs dry
It was destiny for me to be insane, I can see it in the sky
No time to rhyme, nor reason to express; zero consent
I wonder how many feel this
Rather, how many care?
You may read, but can you hear?
I go… nowhere
Just like that, my mood flips and turns
And upon my return, muy mind rejects concern
My mistake is, where, where
Who’s there?
You, there
Truth-slayer
Tooth-decayer
Why did you bring me to you lair?
I’ve always given you my all – my robe, even my hair
This is, is so, so unfair
Lost in word
Infrastructure in smile, congruent to tile
Thought is vile, but only for a little while
So smile; so sorry, I’m running out of room on the page
Which means an idea will too, give birth
I guess this is my finale for the night
I L-L-Love you and that’s that to say
Your name, your aim is to burn by the flame
Your game, is to be played until the end of days
I’m out of words
Thank you
Diane
March 17, 2013 at 6:30 pm
Oh good heavens. How very moving. I think that this is some of your best work.
thatdudeeddie
March 17, 2013 at 7:32 pm
Why thank you! How are you by the way?
Diane
March 18, 2013 at 4:10 pm
I’m well thank you and I trust you are too
thatdudeeddie
March 18, 2013 at 4:33 pm
Splendid! And of course I am, thank you!
ventamatic
March 17, 2013 at 6:38 pm
i really love how you had rhythm and the flow of rhyme is very nice
thatdudeeddie
March 28, 2013 at 8:03 pm
Thank you.
starzinstl
March 17, 2013 at 7:44 pm
Wow, nice! I really like the flow of this poem.
web923
March 18, 2013 at 2:48 am
Eddie, I enjoy reading all of your poetry. I don’t often have time to comment but I always enjoy reading your stuff. It’s great work. Keep it up!
thatdudeeddie
March 18, 2013 at 4:34 pm
Why thank you! Simply reading it is greatly appreciated! Have a wonderful day!
anawkwardducklinginaswansworld
March 18, 2013 at 4:14 pm
Most of your works seem incongruent up close, but when you look at the big picture it makes sense. Very surreal. Good job.
thatdudeeddie
March 28, 2013 at 8:07 pm
Thank you. I’m glad you have noticed that since I aim to have you thinking while reading my pieces.
Stay Awesome!
whocouldknowthen
March 18, 2013 at 8:21 pm
‘For every muscle torn: sarcastic foolishness equates to humble scorn’
‘i see every corner of your glass’
many wonderful lines and intriguing word combinations in the first few poems i read, these two stood out to me, Eddie. i’ll have to come back and dig a little deeper, i followed you so i wouldn’t forget, oh and thanks for your follow as well. means much to this week old blogger.
peace.
thatdudeeddie
March 18, 2013 at 8:51 pm
And thank you for stopping by and reading. That’s means a great deal for me as well. Have a wonderful day!
John w Howell
March 18, 2013 at 8:39 pm
Nice. – John
CANDY TRIP Comic Strip
March 24, 2013 at 12:07 am
Dude… Wow! Good stuff. I hear ya. I feel ya. I’m gonna follow ya back.
emmalmoore
April 9, 2013 at 8:51 am
Fierce piece. LL Love it. Blessings.